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While the idea of a stormy mind or outlook is not a new one, this poem goes beyond the typical cliched treatment. Here, the extended metaphor is given some nice nuances and more fully developed. The reader is helped to feel the welling up of emotion by comparison to the building a storm. The placement of line and stanza breaks is effective throughout, and there is nice variation of line length for effect. One of the stronger lines in the poem, for me, is "the clouds swirling on my iris?" The "match that burnt my soul" doesn't completely fit the storm metaphor, as you don't usually think of a match starting a storm, but the use of the different image does heighten the conflict between the narrator and the person she speaks of.

I think Abbys poem should be published in a book of poems. This poem definatly has potential to be publicly published. It is werid I haven't talked to abbys for a long time, too long, before we had the opportunity to sit next to each other in Comp. class. I am so glad we did so. I forgot how great of a person she is and she is so strong souled and knows that she wants out of life. She is so talented in writing and I love having deep conversations with her about things. I know that she will do great things not only in writing but in whatever she choses to do.